Criticism

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Curt- First, I must tell you that I am taking this poem's action to be a single play of a football games resulting in a sack that possibly resulted in the loss of a game. I much enjoyed the comparison of this interaction to that of a war scene. When you write "The invaders are blitzing in on your fort" I feel this is the strongest literary device in your poem. Its imagery is clear and concise with a strong comparison to the actual events taking place. I felt confused at lines 12-13 where you write "If not released, the ball he is trained to attack/Not released fast enough was the ball". The meaning is clear here as to what has taken place but it is awkward to read. I would revise this were I you. Overall I like the way your poem sounds with its rhyming pattern, although there isn't much assonance or consonance that I found. Perhaps more of this would make this a WOW poem. -Trevor B

Wow Curt, I appreciate how you wrote about a sports scene; your passion for football is inspiring! Your diction, especially the use of the word fort, was quite honestly awesome. Every play in football is intense, and you made that clear in your poem. I also really like line 8 "Found it is, a weak spot, like a wall with a defect." and how it foreshadows perfectly what is about to happen. When I read your bio and how you liked football, I assumed that your poem was going to glorify the sport, so I came to like the fact that you highlighted that some occurrences are not that pleasant whatsoever. Great job! -Lyndzee K.